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Mar. 24th, 2026 05:07 am![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
beccaelizabethI am stalled at page 330 on finishing the magic kingdom book
which is nearly the end
but this book is
bad.
there is one character in it.
he is a bit rubbish.
he is also King because money says so.
Everyone around him only exists to provide exposition or go Oh No Don't and then he do.
They have days and days of travel but it keeps saying they don't talk.
Can you imagine, just days and days of not getting to know each other because they're treating it like zoning out on the bus home.
This is not an author who thus far has a firm grasp on how long a day is, is all.
Make him write a 45 minute script based on this lot and it would cover the whole story and be Dire.
The naked lady has no motivation except Fate and Belonging To Him.
I keep being distracted by imagining any other set of characters walking into this world, and the basic problem is they would tear through the paper thin flats of the backdrop and NPCs without even trying.
Any fandom's blorbos are better realised characters than this and to make the world fill in to their level would take writing so so much of it.
This book is inspiring.
If something this flat can get published I'm not all that bad.
which is nearly the end
but this book is
bad.
there is one character in it.
he is a bit rubbish.
he is also King because money says so.
Everyone around him only exists to provide exposition or go Oh No Don't and then he do.
They have days and days of travel but it keeps saying they don't talk.
Can you imagine, just days and days of not getting to know each other because they're treating it like zoning out on the bus home.
This is not an author who thus far has a firm grasp on how long a day is, is all.
Make him write a 45 minute script based on this lot and it would cover the whole story and be Dire.
The naked lady has no motivation except Fate and Belonging To Him.
I keep being distracted by imagining any other set of characters walking into this world, and the basic problem is they would tear through the paper thin flats of the backdrop and NPCs without even trying.
Any fandom's blorbos are better realised characters than this and to make the world fill in to their level would take writing so so much of it.
This book is inspiring.
If something this flat can get published I'm not all that bad.