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Feb. 7th, 2015 10:12 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
beccaelizabethhow is this fic 30K words of two characters standing vaguely near each other while their friends tell them they should be in love?
in the middle they go on a journey together, off screen, and this is apparently where they spent enough time together to start even liking each other, but the fic doesn't seem to find this important enough to watch?
I mean, it's not even that it's a gen fic, it doesn't spend any time watching the plot either, huge important things happen and we find out when someone rushes in to the hospital room or meeting room or hotel room to tell someone else about them.
also there was one fight.
just the one.
which didn't last very long on account of passing out of nearly dead.
so it's not an action story neither.
and now there's declarations of love and next there will be sex?
it's like the whole 30K just kind of hung around back stage telling us about what was going on, and now there will be porn. But it's not a PWP either, because that's far too much blushing and matchmaking conversations for a PWP.
I want to hit the whole thing with the magic show not tell stick and, like, invert the story, so it follows completely different characters around for half the time and completely different scenes for the other half.
in the middle they go on a journey together, off screen, and this is apparently where they spent enough time together to start even liking each other, but the fic doesn't seem to find this important enough to watch?
I mean, it's not even that it's a gen fic, it doesn't spend any time watching the plot either, huge important things happen and we find out when someone rushes in to the hospital room or meeting room or hotel room to tell someone else about them.
also there was one fight.
just the one.
which didn't last very long on account of passing out of nearly dead.
so it's not an action story neither.
and now there's declarations of love and next there will be sex?
it's like the whole 30K just kind of hung around back stage telling us about what was going on, and now there will be porn. But it's not a PWP either, because that's far too much blushing and matchmaking conversations for a PWP.
I want to hit the whole thing with the magic show not tell stick and, like, invert the story, so it follows completely different characters around for half the time and completely different scenes for the other half.