good phrasing again

[beccaelizabeth]

"those spindly cuneiform histories that inform of Giles' own story all too plainly."

http://www.myarseisnotpansy.co.uk/piedm/mumu/mumu0.html
Mumukshutva by Magpie


nice way of talking about lines, suits Giles well.


I like this story, though I have a bit of a problem with Ethan holding on to the past, or restoring his youthful appearance. Ethan is a devotee of chaos, therefore of change. I always figure that since glamours are portrayed as beginner magic whatever a mage looks like is what they choose to look like. Ethan chooses to look his age. Because change happens. I figure Ethan would be the one to know and accept that, and Giles is demonstrably the one who has a problem with it, middle age crisis style.
But still, the way this story is written, I like.

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[mogigraphia.livejournal.com]

Giles is demonstrably the one who has a problem with it, middle age crisis style. -- which is precisely why Ethan felt he needed to look young. The Ethan in Mumu is rather desperate, you see. He has to win Giles this time or else give up the whole game.

Also, truly chaotic change should not be linear. Aging is linear and inevitable and a law of nature -- exists to be broken, no? I think that's how he'd justify what was really vanity/insecurity anyway ;)

In case you're interested, my original idea for Mumu was based on Kate Bush's Babooshka (obviously it developed considerably from there). If you don't know the song, the lyrics are here (http://www.norbry.net/kate-bush/song/b3).

It's good you enjoyed Mumu, even if you didn't understand my characterisation decisons fully. I think it's one of the best things I've ever written :-).

[beccaelizabeth]

looked at that way yup that does make sense
(not that you need me telling you your writing makes sense)

basically Ethan in my head thinks Ethan that talks to you is, um, basically a pale imitation. Ethan in my head being obviously the great noble and wise one.

This is among the reasons I have to turn stories around and make sure how the other characters would tell it isnt so wildly divergent...

and yes, aging change is more law bound than other change. Yet canon Ethan lets it happen. which to me weighs more. But after Giles many speeches including Ethan in the washed up and old category, I can see him doing different.

(Ethan in my head says he would only want Ripper to accept him as he is, not go changing for him. Tried that and its never enough.)
(Ethan in my head has been talking to me since last November. But only in the muse-author way, so thats okay.)

I did like the story, and it is really good.